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Friday Fictioneers Photo Prompt
Running on Empty
I was so tired of running.
Many long, endless roads through nothingness. Jackrabbits with ears the size of silos on the shoulder and me being afraid they’d scamper across.
When I felt like I could drive no farther, I arrived at a junction where a dilapidated building stood, like many ramshackle structures devoid of life I’d driven by, but this one bore fresh paint; the windows weren’t busted.
I parked, glanced at bloodshot eyes in the rearview. When I entered, saw folks sitting at the counter eating donuts, the last thing I expected to hear was: we’ve been waiting for you.
end 11/3/2016
S. Darlington
Interesting
Could be taken many ways this! Good to leave us thinking!
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No, no! My head won’t take it. 😉
😂
Thank you for reading! 🙂
That’s well-crafted, Sascha. A first line that hooks you, a succulent morsel of descriptive writing with the jackrabbit and then a door opening at the end, Onto what? Whatever the reader most fears or most desires. There will be as many versions of this story as there are readers. Well done
Thank you! 🙂
Nice take, I immediately think it’s not going to end well for her, but hope their could be a good reason why they were waiting on her…!.
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Dear Sascha,
You left me wondering…so many questions. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you for reading! 🙂
A positive spin.. you cannot wait long enough for a waitress.
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Spooky that they have been expecting him/her, but I love the way this could be either horrific or exciting. Nicely done.
Thank you! I appreciate your reading it! 🙂
Perhaps she is wearing a dog collar, so many way to imagine the reason for their wait. Great piece of writing
Uh Oh! Now that’s a twist. Left to the reader’s imagination, the story could go anyway from here. I think they are going to……
This doesn’t sound good. Or maybe it is. It sounds like a friendly group to spend the afterlife with. It could turn dark of course. Good writing, Sascha. 🙂 — Suzanne
Thank you, Suzanne!