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Unlucky
Because she was superstitious, he waited until a perfect sunny Saturday in late June.
They sprawled on a red plaid picnic blanket on soft grass. Her favorite Stilton cheese crumbled on festive melamine plates and soft multigrain bread with rye and fennel seeds. The taste of a crisp oaky chardonnay in juice glasses, his one concession to not quite perfect.
She giggled up at him.
Oh, how he loved her!
He removed the black velvet box from the basket, flipped open the lid and offered her the diamond ring just as a cloud darkened the sun.
end 3/3/2017 (97 words)
S. Darlington
your going to get tired of hearing this, but WOW that was wonderful.
lol….I just saw “you’re going to get tired…” and I thought, yeah. I am. I am tired. But not by your comments. Thanks much! 🙂
lol @ know tired. You’ve been busy so tired is expected.
Brain pain. 🙂
there you go, so weekend! relaxation time! woot woot???!!!
woo…woo…can’t even add the t
lmao
Oh dear… now the poor fool won’t accept;;;
That’s what I’m thinking. 🙂
She’s very food and drink dependent. Is he sure he wants to do this?
Lol! Maybe he hadn’t given that enough thought! Thanks for reading!
Beautifully done. I can taste the Chardonnay, I could “almost” see the sun shining through the diamond ring. 🙂 Great detail. Thank you
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I really appreciate it. 🙂
Delightful.
And a narrow escape?
Dear Sascha,
Perhaps the glitter of the diamond and the strength of his love will overshadow her superstition. And if not, he’s better off without her. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Poor guy! To go through all that trouble, just to have nature remind him that life like relationships can’t be planned.
At least, not moment to moment.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! 🙂
Hopefully she will not be so foolish to ignore all the pains her lover took on her over a trifle like a change in weather. Rainy days can be quite romantic too, when you’re in love. They could splash in puddles, laughing and then have the best excuse in the world to remove their clothing after.
What a lovely insight! I wonder if superstition or love would win?
For me the giggle was the first hint that it wasn’t quite as serious for her as it was for him. And now the cloud… maybe the universe wants to tell him something. Great story, and i love the description of the food.
Thank you. Hopefully he’ll take the cloud to heart as well.
I hope that’s not an omen!
I think it might be! thanks. 🙂