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Secrets
I was eleven when I kept my first secret.
I thought Adrienne, who lived in the mansion, was a beautiful, golden princess.
I saw her the day she crawled through the gap in the fence, carrying a knapsack, her blonde hair a halo.
“You can’t tell anyone you saw me,” she said. “It’s our secret.”
She darted through the woods and into a rusted red pickup. The driver looked at me, his gaze burning me with frost. He pressed his forefinger to his lips.
Fear pervaded my dreams. The princess screamed.
Her body was found a week later.
end 3/22/2017
S. Darlington
Chilling stuff, Sascha
Thanks for reading, Neil! 🙂
Very good. I couldn’t help but shiver.
Thank you for reading, Sandra! 🙂
Dear Sascha,
What a secret for an eleven year old to have to keep. Chilling.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you, Rochelle, for reading! 🙂
Dark take, if he had spoken out it might have made no difference anyway. I hope he spoke when the police started investigating.
Thanks for reading, Iain! 🙂
Oh dear… if that is the first secret she kept, I am scared to know what else…. I got the shivers down my spine
Thanks so much for reading, Dale! 🙂
You created such images, great writing
Thank you, Michael! 🙂
Brilliantly written!
Thank you! 🙂
This gave me a little shiver! Excellent.
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Love that first line, it held so much innocence.
Thank you! 🙂
Bet that was not only the first but also the last secret she ever kept. Nicely done.
Thanks for reading! 🙂
Sparse, taut prose that says so much. Particularly liked the driver’s gaze burning with frost…..
Thank you, Louise
How awful! Well penned.
Thank you, Dahlia
Wow, that’s terrifying. But how would the other girl no better. She didn’t know who the guy was, that he was dangerous,
Thanks for reading, Mandi! 🙂
By *no, I mean *know, but my IPad doesn’t think so . . .
ha! I understand. I hate when I put something in too quickly and forget to check to see what autocorrect has done.
Oh man. I didn’t expect this to go so dark. Nicely done. Brrr.
Thank you, Carl! I appreciate your reading! 🙂
Scary.
Thanks for reading!