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Fortune of Paris
I concede: taking my honeymoon alone in Paris—not my best idea.
Everywhere couples are entwined.
I pause outside a shop with a sign that says “Diseur de Bonne Aventure.” An older woman examines a young man’s palm; they both glance suddenly at me. Embarrassed by my intrusion, I continue along the uneven cobblestones.
“Madamoiselle!” The young man bursts from the shop, French words bounding from his lips. I shake my head.
“English?” he asks.
“American.”
He laughs. “You’re my fortune.”
I frown.
“I’m not insane, I promise. The fortune-teller said, the-love-of-my-life will be the next redhead I see.”
end 5/4/2017
S. Darlington
Well, that’s a new pickup line
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lol and that’s a good comment. 🙂
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LMAO I have to agree with Neil…loved the piece though.
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Thank you! 🙂
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great! 😄
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Thank you! 🙂
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This story could only work on Paris, the city of love 🙂
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I think you’re right. Anywhere else and it might just sound nuts. 🙂
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I would add Rome to the list of cities 😉
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I might have to add it to mine. 🙂
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I hope that she was a natural red head
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ha! I wonder if he’ll find out…of course, that could be a good excuse on her part as well. 🙂
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A wonderful tale,,, of course, it would be interesting to see if it turns out good or bad.
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Yes, I did wonder what her next line would be…
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No hot chick has said anything like that to me since my hair turned silver. Perhaps if I were a multi-millionaire . . . .
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🙂
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but she’s already married! the fortune-teller lied. 🙂
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No, she’s “alone” on her honeymoon because she didn’t get married and decided to use the tickets anyway. 🙂
We all know fortune tellers don’t lie! 😉
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understood. i’m just teasing you. 🙂
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oh….lol…it’s always a struggle with 100 words and then at this time of night my brain starts to fizzle…not that it’s in the greatest shape unfizzled. 🙂
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maybe I need to think about rephrasing…..:) argh (banging head against desk)
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My 2timed in Paris, 1 year before my honeymoon and my honeymoon. Loved this story, sharing it with the wife
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Ergh 2 times sorry
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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Yup. Me too. Ah, if I’d only been a redhead…
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I wondered about the “honeymoon” part also until I read your comment. If that’s a pickup line, it’s a darn good one. That palm reader was smart. She saw the young redhead also. Good writing, Sascha. 🙂 — Suzanne
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I probably need to put another word in there to clarify. So hard trying to figure out the best way to use 100 words! 🙂 (especially when you’re verbose) ha. Thanks for reading and commenting. Very much appreciated!
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Her lucky day… yes…no? Maybe! Nice one.
My FF story, Ma Fantaisie Francais!
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Maybe…I might have to continue on and see what she does. Thanks for reading! 🙂
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Ooh, things are looking up for her honeymoon! Or not… 🙂
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Not sure…maybe the fortune teller needs to tell her fortune! 🙂 Thanks for reading.
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Despite what some have written, I choose to believe she was destined to meet the young man. Nice story.
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🙂 Thanks. I kind of think she was too. Fate placed her alone in Paris…
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So it was a good idea to be alone on your honeymoon… 🙂 lovely romance.
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Thank you. 🙂
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I foresee a happy ending! Lovely story. 🙂
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Thank you, Clare! 🙂
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Dear Sascha,
Alone on her honeymoon…that tells a lot of story in very few words. Pick-up line or no, I’d love to know where this will lead. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks so much for reading, Rochelle! 🙂
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Intriguing story … her solo honeymoon might bring her true love.
The stars may have been aligned. Nice write …
Isadora 😎
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Thank you, Isadora! 🙂
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I think if your new spouse is prepared to leave you alone for your honeymoon, they have to be prepared for you to look elsewhere … Great tale. Romantic but not slushy 🙂
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Thank you, Lynn. I appreciate your reading! 🙂 (I’m also quite glad not to be slushy!)
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So maybe the solo honeymoon wasn’t a bad idea after all. Good story!
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Thank you. I appreciate your reading! 🙂
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No clarification was needed: Alone on her honeymoon speaks volumes. We can, of course, wonder why she’s alone but it doesn’t matter. And why not? It could definitely be a story to be told to future generations: So, Mum… how did you meet Dad again? 😀
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Thanks. You’re right. I had something fixed in my brain, which didn’t need to be fixed. (Well, actually my brain does need to be fixed, but that’s another story.) 🙂 I appreciate your thoughts.
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Ha ha!!
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Ha ha quaint tale
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This can not bode well, and I, for one, would go there in a New York second! Great flash!
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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I love this. I’m hoping she indeed have a future with him, was his fortune. It was a wonderful meet-cute 🙂
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Thanks, Mandi. I might just take this one to 200 words because I really needed about 10 (or 2) more words to clarify her “status.”
I appreciate your reading and commenting! 🙂
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I think it’s funny how the young man and the fortune teller embarrassed your intrusion. Really, poetic and nice way of saying you intruded. : )
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thank you! 🙂
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