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Looking for Signs
Early August
meteorites flash
like spirits
across the navy sky
We watched, waited,
sipped red wine
shared laughing dreams.
She proclaimed:
“if one comes in five seconds
my life will get better.”
Instantly light speared
through darkness
We gasped, hope hanging
We never together
viewed Perseids again.
Her life didn’t improve
but like a meteorite
entering atmosphere
flashed and fragmented.
end 6/20/2017
Sascha Darlington
Beautiful yet gut wrenching. Nice image.
Thank you, Anthony
I like that five second prediction that life would be better and then finding out it did not come true, at least in the way expected.
Thank you, Frank.
Any moment of light in darkness is welcome though it may not have a lasting effect.
Thank you, Sumana.
I think seeing a meteor like that would be one of the best ways of leaving this world especially in company of friends.
or an eclipse as well. 🙂 Thank you, Bjorn.
This poem catches the breath and shimmer of a life. Sadly, we cannot demand signs on our own terms…
Thank you, Lynn.
A shared good time, then realization. Life has a way of changing direction. Beautifully written.
Thank you, Bev.
wiity! how we humans link our destinies to astral signs – for a moment I felt a meteoric rise and glad it was not a devastating bump for finale
It’s true. Wishing on a falling star.
Thank you, Laura.
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Poem is heart touching
Thank you. 🙂
Those last lines are unexpected and powerful, a perfect twist to the story.
Thank you, Linda!
Great clarity to this poem!
Thank you. 🙂
And still we hang on to hope….but that is a good thing. It gets us through, no matter how things end. A beautiful poem. Thanks for your enthusiasm with the prompt!
Thank you for providing it and thanks for the comment! 🙂
I think many people have done this…..If such and such happens, then it will mean such and such. A common wish in a wonderful moment…a shooting star. But such a sad ending here.
Good take on the prompt.
Thank you. Yes, we make little bargains.
Beautiful poetry. The ideal night, hoping for a more ideal life after, but life is life and still hurts.
Thank you, Mandi! 🙂
Such a heart stirring write ❤️
Thank you so much! 🙂
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