Hopelessness
darkness cramps
the sunny day
smoking ashes
echoing
in a room of people prattling
your songs play
but you remove sound
to negate the noise
take in a vacuum
alone
endings lucid, suddenly
they speak of hopelessness
a word
to them
your state expressed
Sascha Darlington 10/9/2017
lovely poem
Thanks so much! 🙂
I like the way you express the hopelessness not merely in words but with the imagery also.
Thank you, Vandan!
Hopelessness well depicted!
The image of hopelessness as smoke on sunny days… that’s perfect.
thank you, Bjorn!
This is such a wonderful choice of words:
“darkness cramps
the sunny day”
So telling, almost visceral. Love it.
Thank you! 🙂
An image of hopelessness created through your words
Thank you, Namy! 🙂
I liked the alliteration in “people prattling
your songs play”.
Thank you, Frank! 🙂