written for dVerse
Photo by Sascha Darlington
Summer Sestet
Braids of brandy hair charming
Child, of innocent laughter joyous
Days, sunshiny summers, effortless
Evenings, chasing flickering
Fireflies until summer’s final whisper:
Goodbye.
Sascha Darlington
Love every line. Can’t pick a favorite.
Thank you so much! 🙂
Lovely tribute to summer. Well written sestet.
Thank you. I appreciate your comment!
Well done! Enjoyed that 🙂
Thank you so much, Phyllis! 🙂
You are so awesome, Sascha. Your writing has changed, grown, morphed and it’s brilliant. Is it me being observant, finally? or just the simple fact you’ve blossomed astronomically?
Oh, I appreciate that so much, Phyllis! You can’t know! 🙂
I’m so glad! It’s what I’ve seen through your writing. The depth of characters the humour, the honesty, the reality of the people and how they respond is simply touching and amazing. Of all the people I follow, you are the one person who has grown in leaps and bounds. Many have changed but not to the extent you have. I only wished that I could change as much. Seriously!
For me, the thing that has helped the most is writing flash fiction that needs to tell a story in 100 words. I think I’ve learned to utilize better word choice that way. And, thank you. I’ve got to catch up with your writing, but I’m certain that all of this practice for us can only make us better writers! 🙂
Your so right. I’ve got to do watch for more 100 word stories because they are so much fun and get “you” meaning me, out of a rut of writing one particular way 🙂
I was nervous about mentioning it because I was concerned you might be offended. Some people feel their writing is the bomb, and it’s good but not awesome. You have leaped to new plateaus, several in fact. 🙂
Not a problem. I’m riddled with self-doubt regarding my writing so I feel that I am hopefully continually learning and equally hopefully getting better.
It’s pretty obvious to me, I’m certainly surprised no one else has mentioned it. 🙂
Beautifully written with unique line splits.
Thank you very much, Beverly! 🙂
So sweet, and like the fireflies, flitting.
Thank you so much, VJ! 🙂
So beautiful sad to say goodbye to summer! Love your summer sestet.
Thank you so much, Grace!
Enjoyed every moment. Seems summer passes just that quickly.
Too fast, Susan. Many thanks! 🙂
Loved the alliteration in the first line and the fireflies saying goodbye in the last. Lovely poem.
Many thanks! I appreciate your comments so much! 🙂
lovely…while reading I was picturing my granddaughter ; the wonder and joy exhibited as a toddler out playing on a summer day.
Thank you, Dorianna. That’s pretty much what I was going for. That youthful joy.
I finally caught my first ever firefly in the dusk of a muggy Midwestern cornfield. It is a joy. So glad my daughters saw the magic too.
I think it’s so wonderful when you see the awe of children watching fireflies. Thank you so much for sharing and commenting! 🙂
the pause at the start of each line emphasises the words that follow, I liked how the poem flowed Sascha
Gina, thank you so much. I wish I could say it was planned, but sometimes something inside takes over and I just write it down and hope it works out. Much appreciation! 🙂
that’s so intuitive, I do understand it in a way. there are days my hand is guided differently too. well done!
And sometimes it works…and sometimes it doesn’t. Maybe it’s the thing of following intuition?
we all go with a feeling when we first start to write I guess
especially poetry. I should spend a little more time planning my poetry though. 🙂
That’s so clever and so satisfying—beginning and ending with the right letters. Gives a lovely feel of repetition.
Many thanks, Jane! I appreciate your comment! 🙂
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chasing flickering fireflies…hearing the whispered goodbye — LOVE this! 🙂
Thank you so much, Lilian! 🙂
Nice photo to go with this and nice last line or word.
Thank you, Frank! I appreciate your comment! 🙂
Chasing fireflies until summer says goodbye is a wonderful way to live. Lovely write.
Thank you so much! 🙂
Lovely alliteration with a nostalgic feel to this farewell to summer. I really enjoyed your poem.
Oh, thank you so much, Mish! I very much appreciate it! 🙂
The last line sounds better in French… Au Revoir … summer will be back
true! But I’d have to make it G’Au Revoir (which hopefully doesn’t mean anything, especially something nasty..hehe)
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Love this. Summers’ final whisper..
Such a joyous and tender sestet. And your photograph is stunning. I love this!
Thank you so much, Victoria! 🙂
Love your photo… and word “picture” of children chasing fireflies!