Love’s Give and Take

One of the reasons why I love to write flash fiction is because you have to tell a story in very few words. That’s also why I like the forms where I have to do the same in 99 or 100 words. It’s a challenge, and sometimes you aren’t certain whether it works or not. This just happens to be one of those times when I wondered if my point would get across through minimal words used in dialogue.

Thanks to Charli Mills who always provides such thoughtful challenges! Visit Carrot Ranch!

Love’s Give and Take

“Pasta Puttanesca? Do I have to perform an intervention?”

“I’m at a crossroads.”

“Something you’re not telling me?”

“It’s not about you. It’s Chloe and that jerk.”

“AKA her husband?”

“He got fired. Wants to be a stay-at-home dad. Do consulting work.”

“Don’t see the problem.”

“You wouldn’t. You’re nothing like him. He’s perpetually lazy, doesn’t know how to use a vacuum or a dustpan. Stove’s foreign as well.

“Why’s this your problem?”

“I promised Mom I’d look after Chloe. I’ve failed.”

“He’s failing. Your pasta smells good.”

“Have some.”

“You didn’t use anchovies?”

“Not when you hate them.”

 

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Sascha Darlington

 

 

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11 replies »

  1. Worked well, Sascha. I like that we don’t know the genders/identities of the speakers, and can imagine what we will. (No, I don’t see them as extraterrestrials … mmm, wait on.)

    I do feel that I should mention my ability to boil eggs, use the microwave and take naps, and if someone asks, I call everything I do “consulting work,” because I consider talking to myself to be “consulting.”

    • I feel as if there is another interpretation to “consulting” that I am unaware of.

      And, thank you. You are obviously not stove-foreign! 😀 However, you do make me giggle…if that’s a good thing.

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