This was written for Friday Fictioneers. My first of the New Year and hopefully one of many more to come. Many thanks, as always, to the wonderful, inspirational Rochelle.
Fully Past and Gone
It’s New Year’s Day, and the beach is crowded with revelers celebrating this gift of warm, windless sunshine and spring temperatures.
Merrie felt hope a minute after midnight, but sunrise brought a day like yesterday, echoing thoughtless cacophony.
She watches walkers on the beach. There are two kinds. Ones who don’t care they crunch on seashells and ones who dance around the tidal stockpile, searching for magic.
A porpoise leaps in shallow water. Could this be a sign?
Liam mocks her signs. “Start living your fecking life.”
Only recently she realized how different their perceptions of living actually were.
28 thoughts on “Fully Past and Gone”
Oh dear. Not sure if there’s a future for these two. Very nice representation of the different types of people walking on the beach.
Thank you, Margaret!
I loved “sunrise brought a day like yesterday”
Thank you, Neil! 🙂
As long as they can accept each others world view, perhaps there’s a chance? You highlighted their different characters well, Sascha
Thank you so much, Lynn!
Time for her to move along on porpoise. His use of “fecking” kinda points to his belittling her thoughts, dreams, and in the end, herself.
Heh. Loved the porpoise pun. Yes, I agree with you. Thank you so much for reading!
Sometimes opposites attract and can stay connected… not always, though. Well done, Sascha!
Thank you, Dale!
What an interesting, thought provoking story. I think I agree with Liam – I’m not a great believer in signs. Nicely done, Sascha. 🙂
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Thank you, Susan!
Opposites can attract in the beginning but over a period of time they might repel each other more. Well told.
I think that’s very true. Thank you, Rochelle!
Loved that… bit of an Irish feel – Liam and fecking
Thank you! 🙂
I like the portrayal of the two different people and he sounds as though he’d trudge over her dreams, unaware of them as he is unaware of the shells or their beauty
Thank you, Michael. I appreciate that you saw the likeness between him and the people who walk on shells. 🙂
unless they don’t learn to compromise, i’m afraid, there’s no future for these two lovers.
I’m not sure they’re fated to see eye-to-eye. Thanks for reading! 🙂
A well-told account of two very different people.
I take it that relationship ended badly. It’s hard to dance through life with someone who insists on plodding.
I think you’re right, Alice. Some people plow through while others dance. Thank you for reading! 🙂
I love how the contrasts ultimately wind up being about them, and I also love the road there. Well written.
Thank you so much for picking that up! I appreciate your reading! 🙂
I like the phrase ‘thoughtless cacophony’. Perhaps Merrie and Liam can balance each other out? Hopefully, he doesn’t make a complete cynic out of her first.
Good story to start off the new year.
Thank you so much! 🙂