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Sisterly Writers (100 words)
My sister watched me, her teeth gnawing her bottom lip. Her words sculpted a rich story, emotion-filled.
Acid churned as jealousy flared through me. “This is the worst thing I’ve ever read,” I lied.
Her eyes grew shiny and her bottom lip quivered. She grabbed the pages from me and tore from the cabin toward the campfire where our parents sat.
“No, Allie!”
When I reached the fire, the pages were charred, sparkling red where embers feasted.
Allie sobbed against mother’s neck. “I wanted to be a writer like Kate.”
Tomorrow, maybe, I’d tell her she was far, far better.
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Sascha Darlington
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Categories: fiction, Flash Fiction, FRIDAY FICTIONEERS
Or then again, maybe she wouldn’t. Lovely ending
Thank you, Neil. Sisters can be odd. 🙂
sadly, it’s hard to accept that somebody is better than you are it’s human nature.
It is. And it’s especially hard if it’s your younger sibling and your dream.
Thanks, Plaridel! 🙂
Ah yes, sibling rivalry is the worst — you can’t even get your parents on your side reassuring you, and you have to keep living with them! But maybe this is a great lesson that will help her deal with other people being better than her in the future.
Hopefully. Maybe I’ll revisit them again sometime to see if they have progressed. 🙂
Thanks for reading, Joy!
It’s a cruel cruel world.
It tis! Thank you, James! 🙂
Dear Sascha,
A rather stinging story of sibling rivalry. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you so much, Rochelle! 🙂
Wow, are sisters really so vicious with each other?
Powerful emotions here, Sascha, vivedly depicted
‘vividly’! Bloody ‘vividly’!
Thank you so much, C.E. And sometimes sisters can be the most vicious of all. 🙁
Poor Allie, emotionally abused. But then, this is the story all over the globe. Siblings rock!
Loved this one.
I believe that Allie will persevere and one day be a great writer despite a seemingly unsupportive sister.
Thank you so much! 🙂
Excellent tale portraying the jealousy and conflict between sisters.
Thank you so much, Magarisa! 🙂
GOSH … jealously in every word. Well done …
Isadora 😎
Thank you so much, Isadora! 🙂
Poor Allie. That’s not family support. Then again, she is invading her sister’s territory. Still…
I can imagine it would be disheartening to find that your sister excels at your dream…yet…
Thanks so much, Alice! 🙂
Nasty! 🙂
Yes! 🙂 Thanks, Iain.
This was a cruel thing to do… envy envy…
Envy can certainly make people behave badly. Thanks so much Bjorn! 🙂
I feel so bad for Allie. I hope it works out for her despite her sister’s lack of support. Well-crafted.
Thank you, Lisa. I think Allie will persevere despite her sister. 🙂
Sibling rivalry at its best – humans are like that, selfish and jealous. Hope she did tell her sister and restored her confidence.
I think she will. Even if it’s just guilt that makes her talk. Thank you so much for reading! 🙂
That wasn’t nice. Sister’s can be really cruel to each other. I hope she gets her own back.
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She probably will when her sister grows up to be the next Margaret Atwood. 🙂 Thanks so much for reading, Marian!
Jealousy is a terrible thing.
It is. Hopefully the big sister will come to terms with it. Thanks so much for reading, Linda! 🙂
Sisters can be so bitchy. Sadly! Well depicted, Sascha!
Thank you, Dale 🙂
Damn!
🙂
I guess many fine stories have ended up in the fire… But please never waste a story Sascha
Thank you, Mike, for reading.
Ah, jealousy. It’s such a bad thing… especially when someone is better at something you love. She better apologize to her sister, she should know how badly criticism can hurt the self-esteem. Great emotional writing.
Great job catching the angst between sisters and the regret when we’re mean to our siblings.
Thank so much, Kelly! 🙂