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Sisterly Writers (100 words)
My sister watched me, her teeth gnawing her bottom lip. Her words sculpted a rich story, emotion-filled.
Acid churned as jealousy flared through me. “This is the worst thing I’ve ever read,” I lied.
Her eyes grew shiny and her bottom lip quivered. She grabbed the pages from me and tore from the cabin toward the campfire where our parents sat.
“No, Allie!”
When I reached the fire, the pages were charred, sparkling red where embers feasted.
Allie sobbed against mother’s neck. “I wanted to be a writer like Kate.”
Tomorrow, maybe, I’d tell her she was far, far better.
end
Sascha Darlington
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Categories: fiction, Flash Fiction, FRIDAY FICTIONEERS
Or then again, maybe she wouldn’t. Lovely ending
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Thank you, Neil. Sisters can be odd. 🙂
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sadly, it’s hard to accept that somebody is better than you are it’s human nature.
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It is. And it’s especially hard if it’s your younger sibling and your dream.
Thanks, Plaridel! 🙂
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Ah yes, sibling rivalry is the worst — you can’t even get your parents on your side reassuring you, and you have to keep living with them! But maybe this is a great lesson that will help her deal with other people being better than her in the future.
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Hopefully. Maybe I’ll revisit them again sometime to see if they have progressed. 🙂
Thanks for reading, Joy!
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It’s a cruel cruel world.
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It tis! Thank you, James! 🙂
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Dear Sascha,
A rather stinging story of sibling rivalry. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you so much, Rochelle! 🙂
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Wow, are sisters really so vicious with each other?
Powerful emotions here, Sascha, vivedly depicted
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‘vividly’! Bloody ‘vividly’!
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Thank you so much, C.E. And sometimes sisters can be the most vicious of all. 😦
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Poor Allie, emotionally abused. But then, this is the story all over the globe. Siblings rock!
Loved this one.
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I believe that Allie will persevere and one day be a great writer despite a seemingly unsupportive sister.
Thank you so much! 🙂
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Excellent tale portraying the jealousy and conflict between sisters.
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Thank you so much, Magarisa! 🙂
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GOSH … jealously in every word. Well done …
Isadora 😎
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Thank you so much, Isadora! 🙂
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Poor Allie. That’s not family support. Then again, she is invading her sister’s territory. Still…
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I can imagine it would be disheartening to find that your sister excels at your dream…yet…
Thanks so much, Alice! 🙂
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Nasty! 🙂
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Yes! 🙂 Thanks, Iain.
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This was a cruel thing to do… envy envy…
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Envy can certainly make people behave badly. Thanks so much Bjorn! 🙂
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I feel so bad for Allie. I hope it works out for her despite her sister’s lack of support. Well-crafted.
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Thank you, Lisa. I think Allie will persevere despite her sister. 🙂
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Sibling rivalry at its best – humans are like that, selfish and jealous. Hope she did tell her sister and restored her confidence.
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I think she will. Even if it’s just guilt that makes her talk. Thank you so much for reading! 🙂
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That wasn’t nice. Sister’s can be really cruel to each other. I hope she gets her own back.
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She probably will when her sister grows up to be the next Margaret Atwood. 🙂 Thanks so much for reading, Marian!
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Jealousy is a terrible thing.
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It is. Hopefully the big sister will come to terms with it. Thanks so much for reading, Linda! 🙂
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Sisters can be so bitchy. Sadly! Well depicted, Sascha!
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Thank you, Dale 🙂
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Damn!
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🙂
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I guess many fine stories have ended up in the fire… But please never waste a story Sascha
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Thank you, Mike, for reading.
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Ah, jealousy. It’s such a bad thing… especially when someone is better at something you love. She better apologize to her sister, she should know how badly criticism can hurt the self-esteem. Great emotional writing.
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Great job catching the angst between sisters and the regret when we’re mean to our siblings.
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Thank so much, Kelly! 🙂
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