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Crazy Love
Invincible. I’m in love, crazy love.
My sister, Jen, mocks me. “Who this time?”
“No one you know.”
When Jose begs off two consecutive nights, I trail him but uncover no answers. I crave his kisses on my neck. I sear.
After midnight, I’m awakened by Jen shimmying down the drainpipe, which sways like it’s hanging by a screw. She drops into Jose’s arms. His lips trace her neck.
The next day after Jose says he has plans, I ask, “Are we okay?”
“Yeah. I got stuff.” He doesn’t meet my eyes.
“Me, too.” Mine involves a screwdriver.
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Sascha Darlington
Ouch, what’s she going to do with that screwdriver!
I think she might find something to unscrew. Thanks for reading, Iain! 🙂
Killer, as they say, last line
lol literally. Thank you, Neil. 🙂
Oh my! The ending was fantastic! Great tension & suspense throughout.
Thanks so much, Lisa! 🙂
Alright! A screwdriver ! Nice one.
Thank you, Anne! 🙂
But it’s Jose who is doing the two-timing, not the sister. Well, maybe she’ll land on him and squash him.
In one of the original iterations I had a line saying that Jen was a boyfriend thief, but I thought it might come across that a week later Jen has taken up with Jose. Maybe it’s too subtle. And, no, you’re right. Jose is to blame as well. Thanks for your input, Alice. 🙂
Oh boy! Hm. Girls can be so catty and unforgiving. Though, guys, it’s their fault too.
What kind of sister does that?
What kind of boyfriend does that?
I think they both deserve a little twist of the screwdriver. Ggrrr …. betrayal and infidelity.
Great story, Sascha. You got my emotions to rise. 😊
Isadora 😎
I think I know what comes next and it’s not good.
Ugh! Not the sister! Anyone but the sister!!
Yeah, I knew a woman who would only go after guys her younger sister said were cute…and get them. Thanks for reading, Dale! 🙂
What a bitch.
Sisters can be the meanest creatures on this earth…
Yep. 🙂 😉
That’s ‘crazy love’ indeed. Although she’s certainly been provoked to her act of craziness. And I love the flat tone in which she delivers her killer line. Well built story.
Thank you so much, Margaret! 🙂
Maybe if it all comes together exactly right Jen will land on Jose and then they’ll both get what’s coming to them 🙂
Let’s hope! Thanks for reading! 🙂
Oooh — how creepy. I like the softly sofly tone you use for the woman – makes her even more scary.
Thank you. I appreciate that! 🙂
No way, Jose. I bet she’s not doing any cabinet making.
I think you’re right. I don’t think she’s going to mend that drainpipe either. Thanks for reading, Patrick! 🙂
Yikes! Sibling rivalry goes to the next level here. Nicely done, Sascha.
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Thanks, Susan. I appreciate your comment. And, I realized that it was the second sibling story in as many weeks. Yikes. 🙂
Ah, now I see what you mean about ladies flying!
Fun story – hell, fury, woman scorned, and all that good stuff.
Yep. Sister broke the code. (Actually, I was trying to steal a character from your repertoire.) 🙂
You are of course welcome to anything from my limited repertoire, Sascha, but with your talent it seems somewhat superfluous!
Me thinks Jose has a nasty surprise coming this way. Loved the concise language, especially “I sear.”
You left a nice comment on my story, which I somehow deleted instead of replying to it, so I wanted to say thanks!
Thank you, Karen. And since I’m time traveling (haha) I can say that in the future you find the comment and undelete it. (I’m such a nerd.)
Dear Sascha,
A screwdriver? Oh that leaves all kinds of things to the imagination. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you so much for reading, Rochelle! 🙂
it looks like they’re planning to screw someone and make it look like an accident. 🙂
Yes, indeed! Thank you, Plaridel! 🙂
I like a woman with a mission. And a sense of injustice. Good one.
Thank you so much, Sandra! 🙂
Love the last line Sascha!
Oh, nicely done. Betrayal is harsh! You brought out the ire in many of us today.
Thank you so much Alicia. (Funny how we’re different than the memes we post on FB, right? haha)
That last line made me laugh in surprise. Watch out, cheaters.
ha! Yes! Thank you so much for reading! 🙂
I think she was going to fix the drainpipe to the wall a little more securely!
Hmmmm. No doubt. 😉 . Thanks, Keith!
Oh dear! Jose is screwing her sister, so she’ll screw the both of them…
Yep. 🙂 Thank you, Penny, for reading!
Her own sister!! (So glad my sister’s not that way.) She and Jose deserve what’s coming to them. Great build-up to the ending.
You are fortunate with your sister, or perhaps it’s the sister in this story who is unfortunate? 🙂 Thank you so much for reading, Magarisa!
Hmm… good question!
Jose is screwed now
hehe…yep! 🙂 Thanks, Bjorn!
Ouch. Revenge is bliss.
hehe. 🙂 Thanks, Shirley!
Oh dear. I think his end is coming
Thanks, Laurie! 🙂
Is that a tool or vodka?
I think it may be an un-tool.
This was an intriguing read Sascha. It offers many possible scenarios. At least she did not want to become involved in a Lorena Bobbitt situation in which the offender’s days of cheating are “cut short”. She could also have greased the pipe and placed a large barrel of water at the base. A rather crude awakening for her sole mate. Revenge at arm’s length works best I guess. 🙂
Thanks. I’m not usually one to write a revenge story or about a character who would do that so it was an interesting process. I appreciate your thoughts!
I agree with you totally Sascha. Revenge is never the answer. But I was thinking about the notion of the “cold reality” awakening the cheating partner.
Lol, I’ve read a lot of writing, and a a novel writer myself, but never has anything hit me like this just did! 😂
Thank you! 🙂